Here is a link to see my San Jose Japantown Farmers Market review:
September 15, 2011
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Here is a link to see my San Jose Japantown Farmers Market review:
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2 responses to “Yelp Farmers Market Review”
triproftri
September 15th, 2011 at 15:47
Hmm, the link doesn’t seem to be working for the Yelp review. double check that and email me when you get it up on your blog post corrected.
triproftri
September 15th, 2011 at 20:40
Ah, it works now! You’ve got some good information in your review, but the writing is a little sloppy, in need of some editing. A few places used cliches. For instance, here: bustles with throngs of people. That’s a bit conversational tone, even for the Yelp review. Also, we talked about breaking apart the paragraph into something more digestable.